Opinion Essay About The Internet

Opinion essay sobre Internet

Esto es un opinion essay sobre Internet, el uso que hacen los jóvenes de Internet y de las nuevas tecnologías. Lo ha escrito una seguidora de La Web del Inglés, Irene G., a la cual agradezco su voluntad de compartir sus conocimientos y aprendizaje con tod@s nosotr@s! MUCHAS GRACIAS!!

Ahora yo le voy a corregir su writing y ella me pide que le diga yo cuál es su nivel, lo cual haré una vez esté corregido.

En rojo vamos a poner los errores, que los corregiré escribiendo lo correcto entre paréntesis, en verde las estructuras fijas que debemos emplear ante este tipo de textos y en azul las cosas buenas, tanto de vocabulario (porque sea adecuado para el nivel) como de gramática, que le dan nivel y calidad al writing.

In the last years, technologybreakthroughs have come upso quickly that we have hardly been able to take ourselves in them, but young people are different and the youngest ones have understood these new forms of communication very fast.

They can spend hours on their computers and, moreover, when they are not at home, they can walk on the street while typingon their phones. could be amazing or scary depending on the beholder (better option: on their phones, which could be amazing…)

For them, it’s terrific how quickly they are able to connect with their friends, to be always in touch with them, to hear their latest news at the same moment they are taking place.

 In my opinion, they seem to have lost the art of making conversation. It’s difficult for them to speak with other people for a long time or even to express themselves because they tend to explain ideas and feelings using emoticons. On the one hand, they have got used to summarizing what they think about something in just a few words so that they don’t need to type a lot. On the other hand, they have forgotten how to express that in a more formal way.

 In addition, it also affects to their writing . They tend to write some words using just a few letters in order to occupy less time and sometimes they can’t remember how to write these words properly.

In my opinion, the Internet can become an addiction and we have to teach our kids how to use it properly in order to get the most of their advantages without suffering its disadvantages.

NOTAS:

El writing está bastante bien, sólo hay un error serio (confusión de adjetivos posesivos), y se han empleado estructuras gramaticales buenas.

ASPECTOS POSITIVOS (GRAMATICALES)

  1. so quickly that
  2. have been able to
  3. spend + on
  4. while + Verb in ing
  5. seem to have lost
  6. preposition of + Verb in ing
  7. difficult for them to speak (adjetive + for somebody + to do something)
  8. tend to
  9. have got used to = aquí cabe destacar que detrás de la preposición -to necesitamos verbo en -ing.
  10. don’t need to + infinitive
  11. in a more formal way
  12. in order to
  13. how + to + infinitive
  14. without + Verb in ing

ASPECTOS POSITIVOS (VOCABULARIO)

  1. breakthroughs
  2. come up
  3. seem
  4. tend to
  5. get the most of = sacar el máximo partido, rendimiento, aprovecharse

ASPECTOS A MEJORAR

  1. Nuestra seguidora ha confundido el uso de rarely, que significa pocas veces, rara vez. Hardly, en cambio, es lo que necesitamos, con el significado de apenas, casi no (almost no)
  2. Genitivo sajón. Yo no usaría el genitivo sajón con technology breakthroughs, no es necesario, ya que technology hace ahí la función de adjetivo. Si quieres más explicación sobre el genitivo sajón, te recomiendo esto: cómo y cuándo se utiliza el genitivo sajón
  3. La preposición con phones y computers es ‘on’, no ‘in’.
  4. Internet siempre lleva el artículo -the.
  5. Confusión de los adjetivos posesivos. Te recomiendo la siguiente explicación si no recuerdas bien este punto gramatical: pronombres en inglés
  6. Also no se coloca nunca a final de oración, sino detrás del sujeto siempre que no hablemos del verbo to be, que entonces iría detrás de to be.
  7. En lugar de utilizar in my opinion dos veces, se podría usar un sinónimo, por ejemplo: in my view.

Vale, pues esto es todo. Según mi criterio, Irene, te daría un nivel avanzado, B2, pero no completado, es decir, te recomendaría seguir trabajando y mejorando tu nivel para poder alcanzar este nivel. Ánimo y MUCHÍSIMAS GRACIAS! 

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Subject: Reading books is a waste of time. All the knowledge you need is online. Write an opinion essay.

In today's world more and more people use the Internet. Some of them think that books are obsolete and every information you need is on the Internet. I strongly believe that the World Wide Web is more useful than books.
First of all, the Internet is more comprehensive source of the knowledge. There are billions of subjects about everything. Everybody can find some information for him. The main advantage of this is that you don't have to use table of contents and go through whole book.
Secondly, all the books you need are online. There are existing eBooks and Audio books, which can replace traditional books. For instance, you mustn't go to a library and check it out, you can just download it at home. As a result, it's quicker and more comfortable.
Moreover, the Internet is multimedia. In a book is only a black text on a white paper, while in the Internet are many animations and pictures, which can help you to remember and understood modern issues.
Argument against using the Internet is that it isn't reliable source of information. There are a lot of mistakes made by users. Books have more plausible issues, which makes them better source of knowledge.

I dont't have the ending, but what do you think about that?

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